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ozmium
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United States
521 posts Joined: Jun, 2008
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Posted - 2009/04/05 : 03:45:48
made this for my girlfriend check it out its on my myspace its called auttie
myspace.com/djozmium
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Edited by - ozmium on 2009/04/05 03:46:35 |
rosin007
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Norway
409 posts Joined: Oct, 2008
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Posted - 2009/04/05 : 13:03:39
The track was okay, it ends too sudden though.
Can you please put up some of your tracks for download like you said in your previous thread with you other new song.
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acidfluxxbass
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United Kingdom
5,000 posts Joined: Apr, 2008
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Posted - 2009/04/05 : 13:09:56
little tip: dont show this to your girlfriend..
the siren's pretty aweful..
theres no bass at all
the kick is far too quiet
the melody seems to sprawl around quite randomly
you will notice that the bass notes, the lower ones under the main melody get louder and quieter randomly, thats because theres no mastering..
the clap isnt very nice and outplays the kick.
i suggest going back onto the FL playground and experiment to build up confidence before revealing any more tracks. listen to a proffessional track, then your own and you will keep on working on it until it's at the right level of quality.
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choonland
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Colombia
1,100 posts Joined: Dec, 2007
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Posted - 2009/04/05 : 17:24:02
yeah, as said above the melody is not very interesting...
add a phat off-beat bass and that will give it the energy it is needing
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and... you have done bettertracks, so your girlfriend is going to think she is not that important because you put more work to the others!!!!
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ozmium
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United States
521 posts Joined: Jun, 2008
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Posted - 2009/04/05 : 18:12:31
okay try raise your hands that one is a little better
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acidfluxxbass
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United Kingdom
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Posted - 2009/04/05 : 20:52:54
quote: Originally posted by ozmium:
okay try raise your hands that one is a little better
same feedback..
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E-Core
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United Kingdom
89 posts Joined: Apr, 2009
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Posted - 2009/04/05 : 22:52:11
The bass in raise your hands seems a bit off beat, but the wrong kind of off beat if you know what i mean
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