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roundhead711
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 Posted - 2009/08/29 : 17:16:20
this a remix ive jus finished wud like sum feedbcak and constructive criticism...
it hasnt been masterd yet.
http://www.mediafire.com/download.php?yzginnljome
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Mortis
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Posted - 2009/08/29 : 17:33:24
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Originally posted by roundhead711:
it hasnt been masterd yet.
My advice would be don't bother. I'm sorry but I really didn't like this one bit.
The melody is weak, the sound you used for it is terrible too. The vocal seems off key compared to the melody and the over all structure was uninspired.
Sorry if that sounds harsh but it's honest feedback. Don't get despondent, stick at it and keep learning - that's my best advice.
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tru bass
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Posted - 2009/08/29 : 18:51:38
what he said...
i did a remix for this track a while ago for the p,p&f album when i was a bit shitter than i am now and i remember how much of a bugger those vocals are.. check it out if you want.
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acidfluxxbass
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Posted - 2009/08/29 : 18:58:07
yeah to add a bit more, the track lacks music theory and is generally of poor quality.
- poor melody
- weak weak bass
- song was not in tune with the vocals
- vocals too loud for instrumental
- percussion samples too loud for the rest of the song. the main part of the song that stood out were the big downsweeps
- without the vocals, the track would still be rather poor, due to the sounds used, and the fact you must have used about 3 layers.
- too repetitive, it felt like it went on for a long time
- bass has an annoying reverb
- breakdowns left me trying to listen for something that wasn't there. it needed a string or pad or something..
keep at it man. i just slashed into ur tune pretty bad, right there, but if i didnt, you might have done all the same mistakes in the next track. by all means keep at it! i thrive on feedback i get from here and there was a time when i was tone deaf and novice at this! lol (has that time even ended??)
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roundhead711
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Posted - 2009/08/31 : 16:21:41
Thanks. It was constructive criticism which was what i asked 4. Its only one of the first couple ive ever done. And i rushed it a bit. thanks guys
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roundhead711
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Posted - 2009/08/31 : 16:22:51
Oh i "tru bass i did check out urs before i did this. Was gud man
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tru bass
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Posted - 2009/08/31 : 17:03:30
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Originally posted by roundhead711:
Oh i "tru bass i did check out urs before i did this. Was gud man
nice one, if you ever want a hand with a song or something ill try and help you if you want.. wether im good enough to pass on advice thats decent yet i dont know haha
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